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Looking at lbriefs ad, my only two suggestions would be:

1) make sure the text is aligned on the left; the "Software Upgrades" in particular doesn't appear to be flush left with the other "bulleted" points

2) you may or may not want a larger focused "tag line" -- one sentence/slogan to draw people in.

Otherwise, it's a GREAT ad, and will look nice in b/w or color.
 
Now there's your ad! That's great! I'd leave it alone (i.e. no logo). That's not to say, though, that you don't need a logo. You'll still need to decide on one: you know... for bumper stickers, t-shirts, coffee mugs, the sides of busses, blimps, etc...
 
blair said:
Now there's your ad! That's great! I'd leave it alone (i.e. no logo). That's not to say, though, that you don't need a logo. You'll still need to decide on one: you know... for bumper stickers, t-shirts, coffee mugs, the sides of busses, blimps, etc...
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Agreed 100% -- but he does have a logo in there, I think. It looks like the beannie logo with the beannie cropped out.

Nice job lbrief!
 
moki said:
blair said:
Now there's your ad! That's great! I'd leave it alone (i.e. no logo). That's not to say, though, that you don't need a logo. You'll still need to decide on one: you know... for bumper stickers, t-shirts, coffee mugs, the sides of busses, blimps, etc...
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Agreed 100% -- but he does have a logo in there, I think. It looks like the beannie logo with the beannie cropped out.

Nice job lbrief!
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Oh. You're right! And it looks great. It's got my vote. :thumbs: Nice job guys.
 
As promised, my friend did some additional designs for you. These are all more serious in nature. Out of them, I think the strongest designes are the { ones (b/w and color) and the all lower-case "dwfcomputers" logos.

The top "[dwf]computers" logo is okay I guess, just doesn't do much for me. The rest don't do anything for me either. The second one from the bottom on the left looks like there's an H carved out of the black block, which just looks weird to me. If it were the D from DWF that were carved out of the block, it might look interesting, though.

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Not bad! My fav is the second from the bottom and on the right. For some reason the lowercase "dwf" makes me think of shorthand for "dwarf"!? I don't know why. Maybe because of all of the recent Lord Of the Rings talk. I actually kind of like the top one too, [DWF]COMPUTERS. I'm not sure why.
 
Man, those are pretty sweet. I'd have to say out of those, my favorite is the one with the 1 blue and 2 green blocks (3rd from bottom on the left). What would you think about making the DWF a bolder (thicker) font? Something to make a little more impact. What about making the blocks have the appearance of circuit boards? But, if possible, keep the colors. I don't know - We all know I have no artistic talent, I need some help here!

Carrie likes the 2 on top and the 2 with lower case DWF's. I like those, but I think I'm leaning more towards a squarish logo - not something really long or really tall.

Anyone else? Does anyone think these are better then the one's in the poll?

Dave ;)
 
Dave: I passed along your comments to her. As for the circuit board idea, it might work, but you don't want to get too detailed/carried away, I think. May ruin the strong clean lines of the logo design.

That said, I actually did up some mockups of my own tonight; they could be executed better, I just roughed them up real quick, but you'll get the idea. Feel free to tear 'em apart, cuz these I actually made myself in 15 minutes or so.

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Of the 2nd set, I like the lower right best, but I think I still like the previous set better.

Dave
 
DaveWF said:
Man, those are pretty sweet. I'd have to say out of those, my favorite is the one with the 1 blue and 2 green blocks (3rd from bottom on the left).
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My favorite as well.
 
"the one with the 1 blue and 2 green blocks "

That one is pretty nice. It would look good on otehr promotional items, as well as in advertisements.
 
Matt R said:
"the one with the 1 blue and 2 green blocks "

That one is pretty nice. It would look good on otehr promotional items, as well as in advertisements.
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The prominent inverse-space H in those bothers me -- but hey, if Dave likes it, that's what he should pick!
 
moki said:
Matt R said:
"the one with the 1 blue and 2 green blocks "

That one is pretty nice. It would look good on otehr promotional items, as well as in advertisements.
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The prominent inverse-space H in those bothers me -- but hey, if Dave likes it, that's what he should pick!
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I think this logo is like one of those ink-blot deals. You see an "H" (and now that you point it out, I can see it too). But, when I first saw this version, I interpreted it as an artistic representation of a computer mouse (fat body, two "clickers").

Anyway that Dave decides to go, you and your friend went all out and deserve alot of praise. Way to go Moki. :)
 
Interesting concept with the circuit board idea but not producable on silkscreening or ebroidery for shirts. I still like the Big blue two little green icon several post back.
 
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